求改作文,在批改网上总是81分……题目：planningornotplanningforyourleisuretime?Peoplealwayslookforwardtotheirleisuretime.However,whentheydohavesome,theysometimescomplainaboutit.Why?Becausetheyhavenoideawhatt|小学作文问答-字典翻译问答网

求改作文,在批改网上总是81分……题目：planningornotplanningforyourleisuretime?Peoplealwayslookforwardtotheirleisuretime.However,whentheydohavesome,theysometimescomplainaboutit.Why?Becausetheyhavenoideawhatt

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求改作文,在批改网上总是81分……题目：planningornotplanningforyourleisuretime?

Ontheonehand,ifyoudon'tplanyouleisuretime,youmayperceivethattimepassesquicklylikeawhitepony'sshadowacrossacrevice,butyoucannotfigureoutwhatyouhavedone.Itseemsthatyouhaven’tdoneanything,buttimehaspassedby.Forexample,whenIwasinjuniorhigh,Ineverhadanyplansformyweekends.Therefore,IwokeupatSaturdaymorningandthoughtIhadnothingtodo,thenIjustdidthefirstthingoccurredtomyhead.ThoughIwasrelaxed,Iwasalsoalittleconfusedatthesametime.Whenmyfriendstalkedabouttheirwonderfultimeonweekendswithme,Ijustlistened.BecauseIwasnotclearwhatexactlyIdidatmyweekendsatall.Inthecasethatwecanusecolorstodescribeweekends,Icanstilltellyouwhatcolorismyfriends’weekends.Ann'weekendwasalwayspinkbecausesheknit;Peter'swasgreenbecausehemowedlawnforhisfamilyandneighborsinordertoearnpocketmoney;Kate'swaswarmyellowbecauseshelookedafterherlittletwinsistersandlearnedhowtobake.Theyknewwhattheydidinthattheymadeplansatthebeginningoftheschoolyear,whichAnnoncetoldmeabout.Whatcolorwasmyweekend?Ididn'tknow.AnditisthatIdidnothaveanyplansforweekendsresultinthedifferences.

Ontheotherhand,ifyouplanyourleisuretime,youwillfindthatyoudreamsaregoingtocometrue.Haveyoueverdreamedoftraveling,reading,listeningtothegoodmusic,learningforeignlanguageandsoon?Youknowthatyoucandothesemeaningfulthingstoimproveyourself,butyousimplyhavenotime.Wakeup!Itisthetimetoabandonillusionofnotimeandbegintoplanyourleisuretime.Isplayingping-pangyourdream?Youcanputlearningping-pangonyourscheduleonweekend.Ishikingwhatyoualwaystend?Youcanmakeaplanandgooutwithfriendsatweekends.Haveyoudreamedofplayingforaband?Doingitonyoursummerholidaycouldbeagoodplan.Ifyouplanyourleisuretime,youwillfindoutyou

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　　Peoplealwayslookforwardtotheirleisuretime.However,whentheydohavesome,theysometimescomplainaboutit.Why?Becausetheyhavenoideawhattodoorwhattheyhavedoneattheirleisuretime,theyfeelconfusedandevenguiltyofawasteoftime.Inmyopinion,thedeeperreasonisthattheyhaven’tmadeaplanattheoutset. 　　Ontheonehand,ifyoudon'tplanyou(your)leisuretime,youmayperceivethattimepassesquicklylikeawhitepony'sshadowacrossacrevice,butyoucannotfigureoutwhatyouhavedone.Itseemsthatyouhaven’tdoneanything,buttimehaspassedby.Forexample,whenIwasinjuniorhigh(加school),Ineverhadanyplansformyweekends.Therefore,Iwokeupat(改为on)SaturdaymorningandthoughtIhadnothingtodo,thenIjustdidthefirstthingoccurred(改为tooccur)tomyhead.ThoughIwasrelaxed,Iwasalsoalittleconfusedatthesametime.Whenmyfriendstalkedabouttheirwonderfultimeonweekendswithme,Ijustlistened.Because(改为,because)IwasnotclearwhatexactlyIdidatmyweekendsatall.Inthecasethat(去掉that)wecanusecolorstodescribeweekends,Icanstilltellyouwhatcolorismyfriends’weekends.Ann'weekendwasalwayspinkbecausesheknit;Peter'swasgreenbecausehemowedlawnforhisfamilyandneighborsinordertoearnpocketmoney;Kate'swaswarmyellowbecauseshelookedafterherlittletwinsistersandlearnedhowtobake.Theyknewwhattheydidinthat(inthat改为if)theymadeplansatthebeginningoftheschoolyear,whichAnnoncetoldmeabout.Whatcolorwasmyweekend?Ididn'tknow.Anditis(去掉itis)thatIdidnothaveanyplansforweekendsresult(resulted)inthedifferences. 　　Ontheotherhand,ifyouplanyourleisuretime,youwillfindthatyou(your)dreamsaregoingtocometrue.Haveyoueverdreamedoftraveling,reading,listeningtothegoodmusic,learningforeignlanguageandsoon?Youknowthatyoucandothesemeaningfulthingstoimproveyourself,butyousimplyhavenotime.Wakeup!Itisthe(去掉the)timetoabandonillusionofnotimeand(to)begintoplanyourleisuretime.Isplayingping-pangyourdream?Youcanputlearningping-pangonyourscheduleonweekend.Ishikingwhatyoualwaystend(to)?Youcanmakeaplanandgooutwithfriendsatweekends.Haveyoudreamedofplayingforaband?Doingiton(in)yoursummerholidaycouldbeagoodplan.Ifyouplanyourleisuretime,youwillfindoutyouhavespentloadsoftimetodo(todo改为doing）usefulandmeaningfulthings.Asaresult,yourleisuretimebecome（becomes）wonderfulandyouturntobeextremelyclearwhattodo,andwhatyouhavedone. 　　Letushaveaconclusion:whynotplanyourleisuretime?Youwouldlearnalot（and)evenachievealot.