高三英语作文II.GuidedWriting:作为孩子应该做些家务,既能够减轻父母负担,也能锻炼自己独立生活.你的作文必须包括以下内容：1.说明家长工作辛苦2.你学会了做哪些家务3.你的感受.Witht|高中英语问答-字典翻译问答网

高三英语作文II.GuidedWriting:作为孩子应该做些家务,既能够减轻父母负担,也能锻炼自己独立生活.你的作文必须包括以下内容：1.说明家长工作辛苦2.你学会了做哪些家务3.你的感受.Witht

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II.GuidedWriting:作为孩子应该做些家务,既能够减轻父母负担,也能锻炼自己独立生活.你的作文必须包括以下内容：1.说明家长工作辛苦2.你学会了做哪些家务3.你的感受.Withthearrivalofmodernera,loveinmanyyoungs'eyesbecomemoreandmoreunnecessary.Inmyopinion,Itcan'tbedeniedthatparentsgiveuslife.However,aswegrownup,theburdenonourparentsbecamemoreandmoreheavily.Myfamilyisaveryordinaryfamily,andmyparentshavegeneraljobs.Frequently,whenIgotoschool,theygooutatthesametimeearly.Whentheygobackhome,theywillprepareforsupperwithoutanyrest.Aftersupper,theywasbusywithhousework.Until11o'clock,theyhavetimetohavearestbuttoolate.Iwantstodosomethingforthem.I'mafraidIcan'tdocomplexthings.Nevertheless,simplethingscanbecompetent.Ilearnthowtotidytherooms,buyfoodtocookandespeciallytakecareofmyself.PlanisperfectbutIt'sdifficulttomove.Butwithaperiodoftimetoadjustmyself,Ifoundtheskillstodealwithvarietyofproblems.IgainalotandI'mproudofmyself.Thehappyexpressionontheirfaceencourageme.Parentstaughtusgrowandlove,whatweshoulddomostisfeelgrateful.Weshoulddowhatwecandonownotplanwhattodointhefuture.修改就可以了,谢谢

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　　亲,你的文章写得很好很用心! 　　祝诸事如意,鹏程万里! 　　Withthearrivalofmodernera,loveinmanyyoungs'eyesbecomemoreandmoreunnecessary.Inmyopinion,Itcan'tbedeniedthatparentsgiveuslife.However（这里没有转反转的逻辑关系,因此不能用however.建议把however改成Thepityis）,aswegrownup,theburdenonourparents 　　becamemoreandmoreheavily(这里要用形容词,不能用heavily,要用heavy). 　　Myfamilyisaveryordinaryfamily,andmyparentshavegeneraljobs.Frequently,whenIgotoschool,theygooutatthesametimeearly（atthesametime与early在逻辑上是矛盾的.建议将此句改为,theyhavealreadygoneforworking）. 　　Whentheygobackhome,theywillprepareforsupperwithoutanyrest.Aftersupper,theywas(注意单复数,这里要用were) 　　busywithhousework（缺少冠词,要么用thehousework,要么用houseworks）. 　　Until11o'clock,theyhavetimetohavearestbuttoolate.（逻辑上不对.翻译成中文就是“直到11点,他们有时间休息,但是太晚了”.建议改为,Theyhavenotimetorelaxuntil11p.m.,butthistimeisreallytoolate）　　Iwants（我是第一人称,直接说want,不能说wants）　　todosomethingforthem.（上一句和下一句之间要有过渡的逻辑词,建议加一个however在这里）I'mafraidIcan'tdocomplexthings. 　　Nevertheless,simplethingscanbecompetent.Ilearnthowtotidytherooms,（缺少必句内链接词,建议加上andto）buyfoodtocookandespeciallytakecareofmyself. 　　PlanisperfectbutIt'sdifficulttomove（move不能用来表示执行计划,建议此处用deliver.todelivertheplan是固定搭配）. 　　Butwithaperiodoftimetoadjustmyself,Ifoundtheskillstodealwith（缺少a.avarietyof是固定搭配）varietyofproblems. 　　Igain（时态要一致.亲前面用一般过去式,这里就要一致.用gained）alotandI'mproudofmyself. 　　Thehappyexpressionontheirface（单复数要一致.这里有两张脸,用faces）encourage（encouraged）me. 　　Parentstaughtusgrowandlove（句子成分不完整.shitaughtushowtogrowupandtolove）, 　　whatweshoulddomostisfeelgrateful(1.most在这里的适用错误,建议删除.2.缺少动词.这里要用whatweshoulddoistofeelgrateful). 　　Weshoulddowhatwecandonownot（把not换成insteadof）planwhattodointhefuture.