求批改雅思小作文~
我是新手,学了两节课,求批改!是图表题,表没有,就是请各位高手帮我看看语法和用词什么的~
Thepiechartdescribesstudents'spendingondifferentthings,suchasrent,food,schoolfees,entertainment,clothesandsoon.
Then,itcanbeseenfromthepiechartthatspendingforsixpurpose.Specitically,rentandfoodforthelargestoneis£100ofthespendingwhiletheschoolfeescost£90.Then,studentspends£60onentertainmentforfun.Also,undergroundcostsentertainment25whiletheclothesrepresents£20.Studymaterialsoccupys£5
Therefore,itcanbeclearlyseenfromthepiechartthatrentandfoodaccountsforthegreastpartofspendingon.
只有一个饼图。有没有大侠帮我把语法错误圈一下啊,完事之后再加15分