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题目Somepeoplefeelthatentertainersarepaidtoomuchmoney.

Doyouagreeordisagree

Theissueofmakesalarieshasbeenanon-goingdebateforquitesometimeinthecontemporaryworldamongofficeworkers.Meanwhile,whetherthehigh-paidshouldbegainedbyentertainmentbusinesshasarousedheateddiscussion.Entertainers'emolument,asIseeit,couldneverbeadministeredtoomuch.

However,amongalltheconvincingreasons,theonewhichshouldbestressedisthatmanyordinarypeoplewhoworkinthemedicaldomain,educationdomainandresearchdomainservicestothesocietyhavebeenimmense,buttheyacquirelessmoneythanentertainers.EvensomestarsattainalargeamountofpaymenthasexceedNobelprize,thisisinequitable.

Furthermore,convincingargumentcanbemadethatitappearsaseaofindividualsprobablygiveupschoolstudyandpursuetoobtainamassofwagemucheasierliketheentertainmentstars.Althoughthereareagooddealofordinaryprofessionhaveastalentswhorequirespecialskillsasthosestarsandpossessyearsofedcationandspecialtraining,theresuitisofteninequitable.Thefull-timestudentsaredoubtfulofacceptedeffectofaestheticeducationwhentheydiscoveredthecircs,thisisbadtoculturenewcomers.

Unfortunately,peoplearebecloudedasaresultoftheyonlyseeingstarsoffunwonalotofmoneywhenasdeletedtheybroughtpleasures,makethemhaveahundred-percentrestandawell-likinglifestylefromownmemory.Forexample,theolympicchampionLiuxiangwonhis6thNationalTitleatthe2006NationalAthleticschampionship,quiteanexcitingmatch.

Inconclusion,IthinktheremaybesomeresonswhyentertainmentstarsearnhighsalariesbutoverallIagreethattheyareoverpaid.Governmentshouldimposeheavytaxesandputtingthemoneygiventopeoplewhodeservertheearning.Inthisway,Ibelievethatthosetalentswhomakingastupendouscontributiontosocietywillgettingaphychologicalbalanceandmoredevotionhiswork,canreducedthenegativeinfluencealso.