判断下列语段是否正确?怎样才能将作文写得更好?
IcanstillrememberthatIwaspoorinEnglish.ItwasyouwhohelpedmewithmyEnglishnomatterhowharditis.WhenIfeelupset,youencouragedmetolearnitandnevergiveitup.AlthoughIalwaysgetintrouble,IstillfeelhappybecauseIdoitashardaspossiblebymyself.
LastFriday,ourschoolheldanEnglish-spokencontest.Ijoinedit.Tomysurprise,Igotthefirstprize.Throughingthiscontest,Iknowthereisnotroubleindoingeverythingthatyouwanttodoifyouputyouheartintoit.