帮我看一下我的自我介绍有语病吗?
Hello,mynameisTangluyi.I'm13yearsold.I’minNO.12MiddleSchool.Ilikereading,writinganddrawingverymuch.Theybothgivemealotoffunandbuildmyuniquepersonalityaswellasmygoalanddream.Inthestudy,Ialsohavetheplacewhichverymanyneedstoimprove,butI'mverypositiveandlookforwardstomyfuturebecauseI'mwillrealizemygoal.