请各位能不能看看我的IELTS作文能有5.
Therearesocial,medicalandtechnicalproblemsassociatedwiththeuseofmobilephones.Whatfromsdotheytake?Doyouagreethattheproblemsoutweighthebenefitsofthemobilephone?
Inmodernsocietywiththerapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology.Mobilephonesaremoreimportantthanusedtobe.Atthesametimemantproblemsassociatedwiththeuseofmobliephonessothatpeopleingrowingnumbersagreethattheproblemsoutweighthebenefitsofmobilephone.Inmyopinion.Idisagreewiththisthispointofviewforthreereasons.
Myfirstreasonisthatmobilephonesbridgetheinformationgaptoeachother.Thereisnodoubtthatmobilephonesarefarmoreconvenientandefficientthanthewrittenlettersormadetelegarms.Atthissatge,nothingismorequalitativeandquantitativethantousemobilephones.Itcostsmethreedaystowaitaletterfromtheothercity.Butitcostsmethreesecondstoreceiveamessagefromtheothercountry.
Mysecondreasonisthatwecanputthemobilephonesintopocketandbringittoeverwhere.Whenwewereintroublesthemobilephoneisoneoftenbestwaystohelpourselves.ForinstancewhenIinastrangeplace,mynewtypeofmobilephonewhichwithGPSwilltellmethedestination.Itisoneofmyreliablefriends.
Mythirdreasonisthatmobilephonesmakeourleisurecolourfueandwonderful.Manypeople,ifnotmost,usethecameraofmobilephonetotakephotos.Italsocanplaysmusicandvideos.WeshoulenotcarrycameraMP3andCDplayeranymorewhenwetravelling.
Sopervasivearemobilephonesthatnoonecanavoidbeinginfluencedbythem.Wecannotemphasizetheimportanceofthemtoomuch.Inconclusion.Ithinkthatmobilephonesbringusmorebenefitsthanproblems.
我9.20去考,高中在读水平,想大作能有个5.5-6
.自己琢磨了一段时间,现在基本能写成这样,能达到目标么?
不好意思!
写作没有5.5的
那能得6吗?