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请各位能不能看看我的IELTS作文能有5.Therearesocial,medicalandtechnicalproblemsassociatedwiththeuseofmobilephones.Whatfromsdotheytake?Doyouagreethattheproblemsoutweighthebenefitsofthemobilephone?Inmodernsocie
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请各位能不能看看我的IELTS作文能有5.

Therearesocial,medicalandtechnicalproblemsassociatedwiththeuseofmobilephones.Whatfromsdotheytake?Doyouagreethattheproblemsoutweighthebenefitsofthemobilephone?

Inmodernsocietywiththerapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnology.Mobilephonesaremoreimportantthanusedtobe.Atthesametimemantproblemsassociatedwiththeuseofmobliephonessothatpeopleingrowingnumbersagreethattheproblemsoutweighthebenefitsofmobilephone.Inmyopinion.Idisagreewiththisthispointofviewforthreereasons.

Myfirstreasonisthatmobilephonesbridgetheinformationgaptoeachother.Thereisnodoubtthatmobilephonesarefarmoreconvenientandefficientthanthewrittenlettersormadetelegarms.Atthissatge,nothingismorequalitativeandquantitativethantousemobilephones.Itcostsmethreedaystowaitaletterfromtheothercity.Butitcostsmethreesecondstoreceiveamessagefromtheothercountry.

Mysecondreasonisthatwecanputthemobilephonesintopocketandbringittoeverwhere.Whenwewereintroublesthemobilephoneisoneoftenbestwaystohelpourselves.ForinstancewhenIinastrangeplace,mynewtypeofmobilephonewhichwithGPSwilltellmethedestination.Itisoneofmyreliablefriends.

Mythirdreasonisthatmobilephonesmakeourleisurecolourfueandwonderful.Manypeople,ifnotmost,usethecameraofmobilephonetotakephotos.Italsocanplaysmusicandvideos.WeshoulenotcarrycameraMP3andCDplayeranymorewhenwetravelling.

Sopervasivearemobilephonesthatnoonecanavoidbeinginfluencedbythem.Wecannotemphasizetheimportanceofthemtoomuch.Inconclusion.Ithinkthatmobilephonesbringusmorebenefitsthanproblems.

我9.20去考,高中在读水平,想大作能有个5.5-6

.自己琢磨了一段时间,现在基本能写成这样,能达到目标么?

不好意思!

写作没有5.5的

那能得6吗?

冀群心回答:
  我觉得差不多可以可是有几点不足需要注意:1段落分析很明确但是每段开头需要适当的变换句式总用一个句形是不利于提分的2文章中有些许拼写错误不知道是你打的时候打错了还是拼写不知道,这个在考试的时候尤其...
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