【帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的IttalkedaboutTheJacksons’specialexperience.JacksontookhischildrentogocampingintheYellowstoneNationalPark.TheymetastrangemancalledCharlieForster.】
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帮我看一下这篇文章是否有什么语法错误或这可以再润色的
IttalkedaboutTheJacksons’specialexperience.JacksontookhischildrentogocampingintheYellowstoneNationalPark.TheymetastrangemancalledCharlieForster.Charlietoldhimabigdisasteriscoming.Hesaid:withstrongearthquake,theearthwouldbedestroyed,andallacrosstheworldwouldbecomesea.Therewouldbenoplaceforpeoplelivingon.Soon,governmentsrealizedthattheearthwillbedestroyedinaveryshorttime.theyhadtostarttobuildthearksasquicklyastheycould.Atlastthedisasterwascoming.Thesurvivorsgotthroughthedifficultieswiththehelpofeachother.
这是我要用来展示的,好的再追分喏····
再问一个问题灾难片大师该怎么说
黄湘莹回答：
通常,一本书或电影的故事叙述用一般现在时.
Itis（这里的it是一本书或一出电影吗?如果是,talked要改为is)aboutthe(T不必大写)Jacksons’specialexperience.Oneday（加上Oneday）Jacksontakeshischildrenforacamp（togocamping表达显得累赘,改为foracamp）intheYellowstoneNationalPark.TheymeetastrangemancalledCharlieForster.Charlietellshimabigdisasterwere（is改为were,虚拟语气）coming.Hesaysthatwitha（加上a）strongearthquakehappening,theearthwouldbedestroyed,andall（across删去）theworldwouldbecomea（加上a）sea.Therewouldbenoplaceforpeopletolivein（living改为tolive；on改为in）.Soon,governmentsknowaboutthat（realizedthattheearthwillbedestroyedinaveryshorttime改为knowaboutthat.).They(hadto删去)starttobuildthearksasquicklyastheycan(could改为can).Atlastthedisastercame（虚拟语气）.Thesurvivorssmoothaway（gotthrough改为smoothaway）thedifficultiesbyhelping（withthehelpof改为byhelping）eachother.
修改后完整的全文如下：
ItisabouttheJacksons’specialexperience.OnedayJacksontakeshischildrenforacampintheYellowstoneNationalPark.TheretheymeetastrangemancalledCharlieForster.Charlietellshimabigdisasterwerecoming.Hesaysthatwithastrongearthquakehappening,theearthwouldbedestroyed,andalltheworldwouldbecomeasea.Therewouldbenoplaceforpeopletolivein.Soon,governmentsknowaboutthat.Theystarttobuildthearksasquicklyastheycan.Atlastthedisastercame.Thesurvivorssmoothawaythedifficultiesbyhelpingeachother.
灾难片大师：amasterofdisasterfilms.
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