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Governmentshouldinvestmoreinteachingsciencethanothersubjectsbecauseitcouldcontributetothecountry’sdevelopmentandprogress.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?
Sciencehasbeendevelopingrapidlyduringthepasttenyears.Sincesciencehaschangedsomuchoftoday’sworld,somepeoplesuggestthatgovernmentshouldinvestmoreinteachingsciencethanothersubjects.Personally,Istronglysupportthisstandpoint.
Tostartwith,duetoscience,wenowlivesafer,morecomfortable,moreconvenientlives:WecanacrossthePacificorAtlanticOceansinanmatterofhourswhichhadtotakeseveralweeksinthepast;WecanalsoattendaconferenceinParisandhavedinnerinNewYorkthesameday,bothofwhichowetoscience.Itisthesciencethatdiversifiesourlivesandacceleratestheprogressofthewholeworld.Asaresult,thegovernmenthavetheobligationtogivetheprioritytoscienceteaching.
Moreover,sincethestudentsarethefurtherofanationtosomeextent,learnsciencewellisofessencetoacountry’sdevelopment.Whatismore,studyingsciencenotjustcontributestotheirownhomelandbutalsotothemselves.Forthemainreasonisthatsciencecanteachpeoplehowtothinkindependently,systematacially,deeplyandroundly.Itcanbenoticedthatonewhodoeswellinscienceismorelikelytobeagreatpersonandistendtobeprominent.
Finally,Idonotmeanthatothersubjectsarenotnecessary,ofcoursetheyallhavetheirownvaluesandmeanings.Buttheyhavenoabilitiestomaintainevendevelopacountry,suchasart,whichisactuallyusedforcultivatingcitizens’tastesandliteraturewhichisatoolofcommunication.Inordertobeprosperousandstrong,weoughttoknowwhatisthemostvitalthingforus.Withoutscience,Icanalmostconfirmthatwewouldneverhaveaccesstohouseholdappliancesandhavenopossibletoseeamovieinthecinema,totraveloverthewholeworldbyairoreventochatwithrelativesbytheInternet.Asaconcequence,itissensibleforgovernmentslaymuchfundinscienceteaching.