英语句子评改
看看下面的句子对不对,
1.Withourentryintotheywenty-firstcentury,itisquitecommonformorefemalesworkingindifferentarenas.
2.Inthefollowingparagraphs,Iwillattempttoinvestigatethebenefitsanddownsidesofthisargument,inordertoestablishmypositiononthisissue.