悬赏高手修改我短小的英语日记ilovinglivingeverysingleday,actually.ialwaysfeltboring.ihopeexcitingthinghapenedsuddenly.ineedtochangesometingusedtodotogainpaintsformyboringlife.butiknow,manypeoplehadthesame
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悬赏高手修改我短小的英语日记
ilovinglivingeverysingleday,actually.ialwaysfeltboring.ihopeexcitingthinghapenedsuddenly.ineedtochangesometingusedtodotogainpaintsformyboringlife.
butiknow,manypeoplehadthesamefeltasmyfeelnow.youmustfeelboringagainifyouintomymind.
ineedsomeonegivesmesomeadvices.mayitcanbemyguidingstar.iwillholdonforeverifitcouldwork.
thenightisgettingdeep.ialsefeelso,asboringashell.heavenforbidme,please.
ithoughtineededfoundagirlinthecrowdsteetatlongtimeago.thereasonissimplethatiwassofeardtotalkedwithwomeningeredalongtime.icrysilently,icryinsideofme.icryhopelessly,causemyfeard.
thankyouforyouseenmydate,thankyoufrommyheart,
高经伍回答：
首句改为Iloveliving...++++++lovedoingsth.为固定短语.
Ialwaysfeltboring改为Ialwaysfeltbored,boring指人对事物感觉无聊,bored则指人本身觉得无聊.++++++
manypeoplehadthesamefeltasmyfeelnow.改为manypeoplehavethesamefeelingasminenow.Same为形容词,后跟名词,feel的名词形式为feeling,另外后面的myfeeling可改为mine来指代,可显得简洁些.++++++
youmustfeelboringagain中的boring同样改为bored.另外你的again是不是表达得不太正确?可改为fromtimetotime或其他的什么.+++++
mayitcanbemyguidingstar.改为Prehepsitcanbecomemyguidingstar你看怎么样?+++++
thenightisgettingdeep.中的gettingdeep应该为gettingdeeper,getting、becoming等词后面应该跟比较级,而非原形.+++++++++
ialsefeelso,如果你是想表达also的话就稍显啰嗦了,可改为Ifeelso(aswell)/,too+++++
asboringashell.heavenforbidme,please.表达不清.你可以说Lifeisboringashell或Thedarknight(starrynight/sky)isboringashell.
而forbid的意思为1.禁止,不许2.阻止,妨碍.与句意不太相符,你是不是想说forgive?++++++++
ithoughtineededfoundagirl...的时态与全文又不符,应把neededfound改为needtofound.++++
你的atlongtimeago又是什么意思?你的前半句的意思是“我觉得我应该在拥挤的大街中寻找一个女孩.”然后呢?“atlongtimeago”-“在很久以前”吗?+++++++
...ingeredalongtime.?应该改为whohasignoremeforalongtime.
icryinsideofme应改为Icryinsidemyheart.++++
icryhopelessly,causemyfeard.后半句可改为italsocausemyfear.
最后一句可改为Thankyouforseeingmydate,thankyoufromthebottomofmyheart-“感谢您看我的日志,衷心地感谢你”++++
我一个一个字打的.希望对你有用.（其他朋友请勿复制哟）
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