语法有一些小细节的错误.我给你改在下面.
DearTim
Howareyoudoing?
ItisgoodnewsformethatyouwillcometoChinainmiddleofJuly.InthatCaseIcanseeyou
I'mfine.
第一句当中,如果你这是一篇考试作文,那么格式上,语法上就必须有严格的要求:
ItisagoodnewsforbothyouandmethatyouwillcometoChinainthemiddleofJuly.(news是可数名词,youandme,不是meandyou,要把自己放在后面,表示尊敬)Inthatcase,意思是如果那样的话.这里不是很清楚你想表达的意思.是不是“InthatcaseIwillbesogladtomeetyou",想表达很期望能够见到Tim.
Highschoolstudylifeisverytired,butIhavealotofharvestIhavemadeabigprogress
Highschoolstudylifeisverytiring,butIhavealotofharvetsthatIhavemadeabigprogress.这里tired是表示人的情绪,tiring是表示事物,高校生活是事物.harvest表示收获的时候是可数名词.
Myprogressinstudywassuchastopleasemypresent.这里was改成is,整体为一般现在时.Myprogressinstudyissuchastopleasemepresently.让我现在很愉悦,这样表述更好.
Onlybystudyinghardnow,canwehaveabrightfuture.逗号去掉.
Ifyougetopportunitytomycity,IamhonoredtoshowyoumyhometownOhit'saquietandbeautifulcityIthinkyouwilllikeit.
Ifyougettheopportunitytomycity,itwillbehonoredtoshowyoumyhometown.Oh,itisaquietandbeautifulcity.Ithinkyouwilllikeit.If从句表虚拟语气是,主句用一般将来时.
Ihopethatsomedaymaybeyouwillbeabletovisitmyfamily
Ihopethatyouwillbeabletovisitmyfamilysomedaymaybe.把表示时间状语的成分放在句子后面.
总体建议,语法上面的问题改完了,不过整体文章通过翻译成中文,在逻辑上还是存在一定的问题,希望你可以仔细检查一下.有什么疑问,
希望我的回答对你有所帮助.
