1.Ihavebeenofferedalargesumofmoneytogoaway,butIamdeterminedtostayhere.
后半句为什么用被动?另外,为什么不用Iwasdetermined
2.Mydaughter,Jane,neverdreamedofrecevingaletterfromagirlofherownageinHolland.
改成Mydaughter,Jane,hasneverdreamedofrecevingaletterfromagirlofherownageinHolland.