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社会（老建筑拆除）

Topic:Somepeoplethinkthatoldbuildingsincitiesshouldbedestroyedandmakeroomfornewones.Isitimportanttopreserveoldbuildings?Dotheystandinthewayofprogressofcities?

Thesedays,itseemsquitecommonthatmanyoldbuildingsareprotectedbyhistorictrustsandinternationalorganizations.Yet,thereremainssomedisagreementastowhetherthoseoldbuildingsshouldbedemolishedforthesakeofurbandevelopmentornot.Perhapssurprisingly,however,theprotectionofoldbuildingisstillveryimportant.

Firstofall,oldbuildingsespeciallythosewithalonghistoryanduniquearchitecture(wecallthemhistoricbuildingsinthisessay)shouldbesafeguarded.Regardlessofcostlyspendinginvolvedhere,mostofusindeedhavebenefitedgreatlyastheexistenceofhistoricbuildings.Specificallly,historicbuildingsasaphysicallinktoourpastandourancestors,affordindividualsboththesenseofbelongingandfulfillment.Forinstance,achildvisitsahistoricbuildingsisabletolearnmoreabouttobeanativeofhisorherhometown.Actually,thelongerhistorythebuildinghas,moreproudthechildfeels.Moreover,thosetime-honouredconstructions,likethehistory,cannevercomebackagain.Inotherwords,wecannotaffordtoloosethem.

However,reachingtheconclusionthathistoricbuildingsshouldbepreservedisnotthesameasassumingalltheoldbuildingsshouldbereserved.Asurbanexpansionwhichcanbeattributedtothedevelopmentofcity,itisincreasinglydifficultforlocalresidentsandnewcomerstohaveaspacetolivein.Inordertomeetthedemandofthepublicaswellasboostthedevelopmentofcities,asIsee,itisreasonabletodismantleapartofoldbuildingswhicharepoorlydesignedandconstructed.

Bywayofconclusion,Ionceagainreaffirmmypositionthatsomedecrepitoldbuildings,whichdiscouragetheprocessofcities,arebetterbedemolishedtoleavemorespaceforthepublic,butthoseofalonghistoryandspecialmeaningshouldbecarefullyconserved.