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NoSmokinginAllPublicPlace
Oneofthehotissuewhichmanypeoplecomplainabouttodayissmokinginpubliceplacessuchasbus,subway,anddepartmentstores.Inspiteofthat,therearestillsomepeoplesmokingcigarettesinsightof‘NOSMOKING’throughthenoticeshavebeenplacedobviouslyinthesesituation.Forthis,manycountriesandareashaveprohibitdsmokinginallofthepublicplacesbylegislation.Ibelievethatthisisagoodidealtoforbidit.
Thefirstandformost,wehaveknown,smokingcanleadtoalargenumberofdiseases,forexamplelungcancer,tracheitis.Evenso,forthesmoker,nothingseemsmoredifficultandpainfulthangivingupthehamfulhabit.Becausethemdependpsychologicallyoncigarettes,whenevertheyfeelnervous,excited,sadorhappy,theyturntosmokingbyinstinct.inadditionly,somesmokerswhosmokeinpublicplacesareofloosemorals.Thosepeopleseldomthinkofthedamagethattheirsmokingharmtothehelthofnearbynon-smokers.Ithasbeentoldbyleadingresearchersinthefiledofiatrologythatsmokingaffectsnon-smokingsmorethanitdoessmokersandrateofpassivesmokersgettingillishigherthanthatofsmokers.So,manynon-smokersareagainstsmokinginpublicplaces.
Thesecondpoint,smokingisharmfulnotonlytoourhealthbutalsototheevironment.Inthepublicplaces,theharmofsmokingisgreater.Thisisconnectedwithanothereffectofsmoking.Thatis,smokingpollutesenvironmentbygivingmuchpoisonousvapouroffintotheairandtheashesandcigarettebuttsleftbehindbysmokersareanotherformofpollution.so,Ifsmokingwillbeabolishedinpublicplaces,mostofpeople,especiallynon-smokerswillagreewiththepolicy.
Somepeoplewouldbeopposedtotheideaofthislimitationisaviolationofsmokerrights,butinfact,smokersstillhavethefreedomofsmoking.Ifonewantstosmoke,hemaysmokeinprivateplaces,notnithepublicplaces.Moreover,inmyopinion,forthehealth,smokerhadbettergiveupsmoking,notonlyinprivateareas,butalsointhepublicplaces,everwhere.
Inconclution,Iwouldagreethatthepublicplacesmusttobenosmoking.Ontheotherhand,thegovernmentmusttoconstitutesomepolicytohelpsmokergivingupthebadhabition.Ifall