cansomeonehelpmewithmypoem?
thisisagainapoemofminewritteninmycreativewritingclass.andonceagainigottamentionedthatiamnotgoodatEnglish,anddon'tevenknowhowtowriteapoem,butnotarticles.
thispoemisaboutmyDad'sdeath
thedayyoulefthome,
itwasthelasttimewemetonearth,
youhadraisemeup
for14years
andIhadn'tpaidforyouloveyet
youweresickinhospital
farawayfromhome
Ineverhadthechance
tovisityou
butheardyourvoicereallysickonphone
Iheldmytearseverytimewetalked
becauseIbelieveyouwouldbehome
recoverandhealth
3monthspassed
youwerehome
butwithadeathbody
iblamedonyou
youhadpromisedme
youwouldbebackhomealive
youbrokeyouwords
butididnothavechance
nomoretoforgaveyou
IloveyouDAD.
Iwantsomeonehelpmetocorrectthispoem.nottotranslateitintoChinese.
Thankyou