以下只能作为一些个人建议,我觉得你才是高手,复合句用得很妙,读起来比较书面专业…两篇不是同一个人写的吧?第二篇好像水准略高一些…. 　　我文法本身就一塌糊涂,只能建议一些语句用法和文章条理结构.互相学习吧! 　　第一篇 　　1.Theprotectionoftheenvironmenthadbecameadailytopicsnowadays-->Environmentprotectionhasbecameatritetopicsnowadays(hasbecome是”已经成为话题”,不是”过去成为”;“dailytopic”也可,建议改为”老生常谈的话题”) 　　2.despitethemedia'sefforttodisplaythateffortshadbeenplacedonthissubject,thetotalissueofenvironmentstillprovedtobefailure.----->despitethefactthatthemediasdisplayedthatagreatefforthasbeenplacedonthissubject,thecurrentenvironmentstatusasawholestillproveditsinsufficiency.(原句不是很理解) 　　3.Howdiditfail?-->Howcome?(因为我已把前面的failure去了,所以以只能改成这样,哈哈) 　　4.well,everyonehaddonetheirbestinhelpingtheenvironmentgettingbetter,butsomehadthoughtthatacleanerandamoreorganizedenvironmentwilldobetter.--->(前后没有转折关系,何以用but?逻辑上不应该是everyone都做到了保护环境这种事情,请楼主再考虑一下这一点.) 　　5.thosepeoplehaddonetheirbestpossibletocleartheforestandtoplanttreesinorder.--->thosepeoplehasdonetheirbesttocleantheforestandtoplanttrees. 　　6.theyeventriedtoartificiallycreatthebestenvironmentwithoutanybiologicalknowledgeonhowtheecosystemcoulddowhatitneededitself-->建议改成其他,如otherwise,also等,后面也注意衔接一下. 　　8.Asasummary--->Insummary 　　9.itisthewaysthattheyaredoingthethingsthat---->itisthemethodstheytake 　　第二篇 　　1.It’snotsurprisingtofindthatprotectionoftheenvironment...---->It’snotsurprisinglytofindthatenvironmentprotection... 　　2.onamongst--->amongst 　　3.careless--->inconspicuous(“不起眼的”,对应后面的”huge”,或者可以两者同时去掉) 　　4.intheindustrialcenters(建议去掉,没有必要这样强调,污染的工厂不只限于在工业区) 　　5.Whenweuseplasticbagsinthegrocerystoresinsteadofpaperbags---->Whenweuseone-offplasticbagsinsteadofshoppingbags(最好不要这样写,试想像把我们使用的所有塑料袋换成牛皮纸,那得砍伐多少树木…所有过剩包装都是污染环境的.或者把insteadof及之后去掉) 　　6.degenerate---->(这样说应该也可以,或者说bedigestedbynature) 　　7.contributingto---->ascribedto 　　Basedontheimpropermeasureshumantook(article1)andtheexistingpollutionfactors(article2),youillustratedyourideaswellonthefailureofenvironmentprotection,yougotnoprobleminEnglish,theywouldbeperfectifyoucouldtrytopolishyourthoughts. 　　Fromthoughtindepthperspective,youwouldtrytoalsoconsiderthefollowings. 　　IndevelopingcontrieslikeChina,peoplewhoconsciouslyrealizetheimportanceofenvironmentprotectionandputitintoactionisstillminority,whereasthesecountriespossessamajorityoftheworldpopulation,justimaginehowmanygarbagesproducedbythem.Conceptsarerootsofallproblems,educationandpropagandaareweakpoints. 　　AlthoughmorethanahundredcountriesjoinedinKyotoProtocol,theU.S.,astherichestcountryproducethemostgreenhousegasintheworld,haven’tjoinedinthisprotocal.Theykeepcriticisingother’spollution,buttheyalsodonogoodforit. 　　… 　　Trytodosomesearchonlinetogetmoreinformationtoenrichyourarticle. 　　Cheers~