谁帮我改改这段作文.
只是个例子:
TakemypianostudentCandyforexample.Herfatherisasuccessfulbusinessmanwhoearnsahugeamountofmoneyeveryyear.However,afterlearningthegoodnewsthatCandywonthefirstprizeinapianocompetition,herfathersaidgladly,theawardsmydaughterwonofferedmeamazingfeelingthatnomatterhowmuchmoneyIearnedcannevercomparewithit.
主要改语法和更好的表达.多谢!