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剑桥五text4的小作文
Thetableillustratesthefigureaboutthesubwaysystemsinsixseparatecities:London,Paris,Tokyo,WashingtonD.C.,Kyoto,andLosAngeles.
Londonisthefirstcityopenedsubwaysystemsin1863,whileLosAngelesisthelastone2001.Asfortheotherfourcities,allofthemopenedthesystemsin1900s
.Londonalsohasthelongestroute(394kilometers)amongthesesixcities.However,thereisbyfar.ShortestrouteinKyotoandLosAngeles(11kilometersand28kilometersrespectively).Therouteoftherestthreecitiesbetween100and200.
Tokyohasthelargestamountofpassengers(1927millionsforyear),whichisfollowedbythatofLondon(775millionsperyear)andParis(1191peryear).ThefigureforKyotoandLosAngelesaresimilar(around50millionsperyear).
Allinall,Londonhastheoldestandlongestsubwaysystems.Tokyo’ssystemsservicemostpeoplebycomparedothercities,KyotoandLosAngelshavenewandsmallsizesystems.
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