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Astechnologydevelops,moreshoppingandbusinessisdonethroughtheinternetwhilecommunicationfacetofacebecomeslessfrequent.Isthisapositiveoranegativedevelopment
Nowadays,moreshoppingandbusinesscandonebyusetheinternet,thentheopportunityofcommunicationfacetofacebecomeslessfrequent.Somepeoplethinkthatisapositivedevelopment,butalsomanyuserithassomenegativeelements.
Ofcaurse,internetbringplentyofconvenientstous.Firstofall,shoppingordomanyotherthingsthroughtheinternetthatsaveourtime,weneedn’tspend1hourevenmoreontransportation,fromanotherside,forinsitense,ifyoushoppingthroughttheinternet,youcanbrowseallyouwantquickly,isteadtogotothoseshopsonebyone,itmakesusbecomemoreefficiency.Secondly,thatmayleaveusfromdangerours,wejuststayathome,withoutthetrafficeandotheraccident.
Italsohassomebadpoint.Peopleconstructthisworld,wehavetocommunicatewithother,thatwejustusekeyboardtotapeisnotenough,eventhoughsometimeswecanhearthevoiceorseetheimage,butthosecannottaketheplaceoffacetofacecommunication.Then,theremaythingsarenotrealinthatworld,cheatingandlyingbecomeeasier.
Inaddition,everythinghavegoodpointsandbadpoint,eventheinternet,thatisacommonsense.Buthowtouseitbetterisimportant,anditiswehavetodo.
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