麻烦英语达人批改一篇英语作文(高三)
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CaringforChildren
Inmycountry,mostofpeoplepayalotofattentiontobabiesandsmallchildren.somepeoplegiveuptheircareerinordertocaretheirbabiesandsmallchildrenattentively.othersasktheirparentstocareforthem.seldomchildrenaresenttodaycarecentersbecausemostofparentsprefertolookafterrthembythemselveseveniftheyareverybusywiththeirwork.someparentssendtheirchildrentoswimmingcenters.thereareprofessionalswimmersandexperiencedteacherstoteachthemhowtoswim.childrenhavemanykindsoftoyssuchaspuzzles,beardolls.theyenjoyplayinggameswiththeirfriendslikehide-and-seek.theyarefondofsingingsongswhentheyareinhighspirits.forexample,twotigers,onlymomisniceintheworld.