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像我这篇雅思作文大概能拿多少分?时间我自己计了一下正好40分钟,但中间有很多涂改痕迹.Topic:Insomecountriesyoungpeopleareencouragedtoworkortravelforayearbetweenfinishinghighschoolandstartingunivers
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像我这篇雅思作文大概能拿多少分?时间我自己计了一下正好40分钟,但中间有很多涂改痕迹.

Topic:Insomecountriesyoungpeopleareencouragedtoworkortravelforayearbetweenfinishinghighschoolandstartinguniversitystudies.Discusstheadvantagesanddisadvantagesforyoungpeoplewhodecidetodothis.

Inrecentyearstherehasbeenaheateddebateonwhetheritisgoodfortheyoungtoworkortravelforayearbetweengraduatingfromhighschoolsandstartinguniversitystudiesinmanycountries.Thisessayiswrittentodiscussboththepositiveandnegativeimpactsitwillcause.

First,Ibelievewhattheyoungconsiderislimitedbywhattheyhavelearnedfromteachersandbooks,whileoneyear'sworkortravel,whichcanenrichtheirexperiencesandexpandtheiroutlook,willencouragethemtoconsiderindefferentways,whichwillbebenificialforthemtostudyinuniversities.Second,workexperiencescanmakethemunderstandtheimportanceofcooperationandcommunication,andhelpthemtoacquiretheknowledgeandskillsneededinworkplace.Futhermore,travellingbeforegoingtouniversitycanrelievetheirpressureandprovidethemmoreenergytostudy.

However,everythinghastwosideslikesword,andsohasthistoo.Inthefirstinstance,thestudentsaresoyoungthattheyareeasytobecheatedwhentheyparticipateinsocialworkortraveloutschools.Second,oneyear'sabsenceofstudymaycausethemforgetwhattheyhavelearnedinhighschoolsandtheconsequenceisthatthecoursesinuniversitywillbemoredifficulttothem.Whatisworse,thiscanaisomakethemloseinterestinkeepingstudyingiftheyaresatisefiedwithalittlesuccesstheyhavegotintheshortwork,whichwillpreventthemtobeadvancedtalentedpersons.

Tosummarise,Ibelievetheadvantagesaremorethandisadvantages.Tomakeoneyear'sworkortravelmoreuseful,Isuggestthatuniveisitiesshouldprovidesomeguideforthestudentstoavoidthenegativeimpacts.

舒云星回答:
  国内雅思笔试是用铅笔答题,所以所谓的涂改痕迹不是很重要.   这篇文章个人认为最可能的是5-5.5,低级语法错误太多了,而且表达也不算地道,存在拼写错误……好好看看慎小嶷的十天系列两本书吧……两边倒结构OK.但是论据展开太不充分了(每边三论据,而且太宽泛.)
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